Some people believe that watching big events like sports and the Olympics on TV encourage adults to exercise regularly. While others disagree that there are other effective ways of getting them to exercise.Discuss both views and give your opinion

The media
has become
Suggestion
have become
one of out of the many
infulentinal
having or exercising influence or power
influential
ways of disseminating information in recent times. People who watch sports and
olympics
the modern revival of the ancient games held once every 4 years in a selected country
Olympics
on the tv tend to emulate and practice what they have seen.
Its
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It's
easier for one to
pracrtice
a customary way of operation or behavior
practice
practise
this
way of
excercising
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
bodies as its done within ones free time and vicinity and the cost of running the
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
is zero.
On the other
hand theres
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hand, there's
hand there's
hand there
hand Theresa
a
grater
greater in size or importance or degree
greater
percentage who
dont
do not
don't
feel the same way
,
Accept space
,
they feel they are better ways of getting them to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
than watching sports and
olympic
of or relating to the Olympic Games
Olympic
tv shows. They feel they could pay an instructor who could dedicate his time and energy and put in work in training them at
thier
of them or themselves
their
lesiure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time. They
also
feel
its
it is
it's
easier to pay and get your moneys worth than randomly watching shows and trying to emulate what you see there.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
personally agree that there are other ways
,
Accept space
,
very effective ways of getting adults to
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
using various means which are at our
finger tips
the end (tip) of a finger
fingertips
.
they
Suggestion
They
can start out a daily workout routine before waiting for the sports show to come up on tv.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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