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Around 11% of the
population which
Accept comma addition
population, which
 accounted for 1837000 people in Australia lived in
poverty
 in 1999. Among all households, aged couples were the least hit by
poverty
 as only 4% of these citizens have been classified in
this
 category.
Next
 to the aged couple, come
single
Suggestion
singly
-aged people, 6% or 54,000 of them are poor. Those couples who don't have children seem to be less affected by paucity of money as only 7% of these people are impoverished, much lesser than those with couples who have children and figuring lying around 12% or 933000. They constitute the greatest proportion of poor people in the country owing to the fact of occupying
major part
Suggestion
a major part
 in the overall population. Contrary to the expectation, a high percentage of single people (19%) with no children live in
poverty
. Household worst affected by
poverty
 is the one constituted of sole parents, among whom almost 21% can't afford basic life amenities. One plausible explanation of the above pattern can be, with couples household expenses, work is divided which is difficult with single people. Adding to
this
 reasoning, sole parents having additional expenditure for children
find
Suggestion
finds
 it more difficult to manage their finances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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