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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find ur difficult to get a university education. University should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #backgrounds #ur #university #education #groups #enrol
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Nowadays, in
this
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world
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world, education
education
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vhas
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v has
 become a powerful weapon to change the world. It is a common belief that gaining
university
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 study is essential for pupils to achieve their goals and live a better life. But, most of the poor people are not able to take admission in the
university
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 due to financial problems. Some mortals deem that
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university
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universities
the university
 should make some rules for
unwealthy
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 masses to indulge
.
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.
 I agree with
this
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view but
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view, but
 it can
also
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 have
effect
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effects
 on the economy of the institutions. To embark with, there are many ways which
university
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 provide
education
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 to poor people. The primary major factor is that
government
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the government
 should provide funds as like charity to the institutions for giving scholarship for the
pooer
deserving or inciting pity
poor
poorer
 pupils to continue their
further
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 study.
However
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,
university
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 authority should allocate
atleast
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at least
 20% of
seats giving
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seats, giving
 to those students who are not
afford
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afforded
 to pay fees.
For example
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,
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,
 in India approximately 30% of poor students get
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education
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an education
the education
 free due to providing all facilities by the government. Moving to
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further point
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a further point
, if institutions provide free
education
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 to poor students it may adversely
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the other pupils.
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, providing free
education
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 may it put bad impact on
economy
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the economy
 of the
university
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. In conclusion, according to my perspective
university
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 should make it easier for poor people to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in
higher level
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a higher level
 of
education
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.
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, institutions should provide special pathways to them.
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