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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find ur difficult to get a university education. University should make it easier for such groups to enrol. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #backgrounds #ur #university #education #groups #enrol
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Nowadays, in
this
world
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world, education
education
vhas
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v has
 become a powerful weapon to change the world. It is a common belief that gaining
university
 study is essential for pupils to achieve their goals and live a better life. But, most of the poor people are not able to take admission in the
university
 due to financial problems. Some mortals deem that
university
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universities
the university
 should make some rules for
unwealthy
 masses to indulge
.
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.
 I agree with
this
view but
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view, but
 it can
also
 have
effect
Suggestion
effects
 on the economy of the institutions. To embark with, there are many ways which
university
 provide
education
 to poor people. The primary major factor is that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should provide funds as like charity to the institutions for giving scholarship for the
pooer
deserving or inciting pity
poor
poorer
 pupils to continue their
further
 study.
However
,
university
 authority should allocate
atleast
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at least
 20% of
seats giving
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seats, giving
 to those students who are not
afford
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afforded
 to pay fees.
For example
,
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,
 in India approximately 30% of poor students get
education
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an education
the education
 free due to providing all facilities by the government. Moving to
further point
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a further point
, if institutions provide free
education
 to poor students it may adversely
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the other pupils.
Moreover
, providing free
education
 may it put bad impact on
economy
Suggestion
the economy
 of the
university
. In conclusion, according to my perspective
university
 should make it easier for poor people to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in
higher level
Suggestion
a higher level
 of
education
.
Furthermore
, institutions should provide special pathways to them.
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