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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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An average citizen should have free access to
health
 service come what may.
Although
,
this
 is or may not be the case in its entirety as studies have shown that there is only one out of a hundred
health
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
that is
 actually free. Free
health
 service has a long way of benefiting an average individual, it’s like “taking one load off your shoulders”. It gives every individual an opportunity to have a leeway to medical treatments.
For instance
, a malaria patient should be able to walk into any closest hospital and get treated without paying a dine.
Although
, there are some chronic ailments that are too expensive and may not be freely.
For instance
, ailments
such
 as cancer, HIV, Fibroids, Surgical operations are way too expensive as
such
 that an average individual may not afford and that’s why we see various other people soliciting for funds on behalf of another because it is way above their income. In my candid opinion, be it as ordinary as malaria or a chronic ill
health
, there should be facilities and intervention funds set aside to assist individuals in getting a good treatment that they truly deserve as an adage will say “
health
 is wealth”.

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