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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. Which are these problems? Should government encourage people to move to small regional areas?

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In recent years, city dwellers have been struggling with
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number
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a number
the number
 of problems in their everyday life.
This
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 essay will discuss with two major problems,
pollution
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 and
traffic
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 congestion, which I believe should lead the government to encourage people to move to different provinces.
To begin
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 with, the ever increasing
number
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 of vehicles in cities
create
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creates
accute
a record or narrative description of past events
account
acute
accurate
traffic
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 congestion.
Moreover
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, poor infrastructure of roads is another main reason of
traffic
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 calamities. Heavy
traffic
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 in cities
make
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makes
 people's lives difficult.
For instance
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, the rate of road fatality has been increased in
last
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 few decades due to these issues.
On the other hand
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,
pollution
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 is
anoth
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 Problem that people have to cope up with. The
number
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 of vehicles used is the key factors influencing
pollution
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.
Consequently
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, many people are suffering from respiratory diseases
such
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 as, lunge cancer. To continue, government should do what they can do to inspire people to move in areas where population is lower than big cities.
This
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 may reduce the
number
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 of vehicles in big cities which surely will minimise the road accidents and improve the air quality.
Furthermore
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, fewer people in cities will relieve the pressure of paying
high expense
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the high expense
 of housing and power supply. Studies have shown that people's living in small, uncomfortable spaces
directly
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direct
 affect on mental health, and these are the big issues of
unhappy life
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an unhappy life
. In conclusion, severe
pollution
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 and
traffic
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 calamities are the main problems for city people. In my opinion, the authorities should inspire people to move to different provinces, which not only will help them to cope up with these problems but handle the overall situation.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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