It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early stage. Punishment is necessary to learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Some people still
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
belief
that they can change the
way
of growing
tree
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trees
at the initial
stage
of planting
on the other
hand some
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hand, some
might argue that the
tree
will
growup
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grow up
the
way
it wants no matter how many obstacle you are putting on it. The same theory
also
applicable when you are
raiding
increasing in quantity or value
raising
a child.
That
is you
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is, you
can influence the child
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
by
way
of showing
correct path
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the correct path
to them.
This
may come as an advice, punishment,
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
or teaching.
However
, it is proven that people can
chage
cause to change; make different; cause a transformation
change
charge
the
midesep
of young kid who are trying learn at their initial
stage
of
life
.
Hence
,
this
essay will provide more information towards the agreement on the statement.
Firstly
, society should know that the kids are trying to learn things that they are experiencing from the community they involved.
Therefore
, it is important to have a proper
guidence
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
to clarify which is wrong and which is
right
. If
someone
is unable to identify the difference of
this
, they he will keep doing the same thing without any knowledge. For an example, take a garbage disposal area in a flat complex where the bins are categorised based on the types of the garbages. All the
flat mates
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flatmates
are disposing their garbage
unintentianally
without intention; in an unintentional manner
unintentionally
to whatever the bin available down the flat. In
this
case
no body
a person of no influence
nobody
will think that they should put into the proper bin. In
this
situation all
the young
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the younger
younger
kids might think that
this
is not wrong unless
someone
teach
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teaches
them. So once they grew, they
also
do the same thing that they have experienced in
thier
of them or themselves
their
childhood.
Secondly
, Always tell the
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
of some activities that the parent had done. Young
mind
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minds
will not understand the impact of doing
right thing
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the right thing
to society unless they informed by
someone
. Sometimes, most of our parents are thinking that they are demonstrating the role model for the juniors.
However
, parents have no idea, whether these juniors have got the clear idea which they wanted to communicate.
Thefore
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Therefore
,
someone
might assume that there is no point of showing them the
right
way
.
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Because
of
this
reason, it is very important to ensure that the
massage
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
has been transferred properly.
This
can be done by
someone
else who is looking
on
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at
this
situation. The best example that we can take is the caring of parents. For an instance, assume your father is taken care of your grandfather. Since
this
is a day to day activity at
home you might think
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home, you might think
that
this
is not that much important.
However
, your mother, can explain
this
to
you and
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you, and
make
such
important discussion with you can put the
massage
a communication (usually brief) that is written or spoken or signaled
message
inside you.
Then
you
also
start thinking that,
oneday
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one day
I will take of my father, as he did for my grandfather. In summary, we need to
blend
form a curve
bend
the
tree
during the time we can do it. Once the
tree
is well established there is no chance of changing it.
Accordingly
, we need to see the
way
of data collection by small ones and we need to filter the data
show
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shown
them what is wrong and what is
right
. So they
also
try to behave
on
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in
the same
way
. Based on all these points and arguments we agree to the point that it is very important
to
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for
children to learn the
right
and wrong at their early
stage
. Because you can have
negligable
so small as to be meaningless; insignificant
negligible
punishment at the early
stage
of your
life but
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life, but
things will be different at the middle or latter
stage
of the
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral development
  • early childhood
  • right and wrong
  • punishment
  • consequences
  • appropriate
  • moderation
  • positive reinforcement
  • modeling behavior
  • reasoning
  • psychological effects
  • fear
  • aggression
  • self-esteem
  • cultural differences
  • parenting
  • discipline
  • teaching morality
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