others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements

On the other hand
, I side with those who argue that schools should reward graduates who make great developments in the educational environment.
Firstly
, Rewarding students for
good
Suggestion
better
improvements could create motivations for everyone in the classroom. If graduates know their efforts are recognized, they will work harder to yield higher results.
In
Suggestion
To
contract
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
, only smart students can be able to come top in the class are rewarded while normal students may think that they can't possibly afford to compete with intelligent students.
Therefore
, we should reward improvement so as not to discourage their potential.
Secondly
, a rewarding scheme based on scores can encourage cheating. Because students are obsessed by reward, they resort to any means available
such
behaviours: copying others answers or opening books.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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