Nowadays people moving to other countries to seek job. Some people think it affects the children of such home negatively while some others think it is beneficial to them. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

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contemporary era, people moving to abroad for Job

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are going to International countries for job purpose. Few people think

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, numerous people moving abroad for a good purpose; leaving children unhappy in some cases. They miss their own country and

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have been living. They feel lonely as there are

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, huge difference in the weather, new living habits, unknown people to look around, new languages and many more things one has to go through while staying alone in other countries.

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to new environment easily. For most of the individuals moving to other countries plays a vital role. It completely changes their standard of living and gives a positive impact to children. Many children mingle easily with other people and new location. In

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case, there have numerous advantages on their lives.

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, children and adults have

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, from my perspective going aboard can lead many advantages for a family.

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, they start living by their own without depending on others and started learning new technologies at work and many more new things around them. One of my best friends moved to Canada with their children and got adjusted very easily and is jubilant staying there. In conclusion, even though there are many obstacles moving to abroad, but there are always many merits for the whole family. In my opinion, I believe that moving abroad is a good choice for a person that gives many benefits to his family.

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Nowadays people moving to other countries to seek job. Some people think it affects the children of such home negatively while some others think it is beneficial to them. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people believe that children should be given lessons on how to manage money in the school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?