Nowadays people moving to other countries to seek job. Some people think it affects the children of such home negatively while some others think it is beneficial to them. Discuss both sides and state your opinion.

In
this
contemporary era, people moving to abroad for Job
has become
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have become
fascinating popular.
Currently individuals
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Currently, individuals
are going to International countries for job purpose. Few people think
this
can have
positive affect
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a positive effect
positive effect
on children while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
thinks it can have a negative impact. In
this
essay, I will argue on both the scenarios and give my point of view.
Although
, numerous people moving abroad for a good purpose; leaving children unhappy in some cases. They miss their own country and
city there
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city, there
have been living. They feel lonely as there are
use
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used
to live
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to living
in a home country, surrounding their relatives and friends.
This
happens because some children
are not get
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are not getting
don't get
do not get
adjusted to a new environment easily.
For example
, huge difference in the weather, new living habits, unknown people to look around, new languages and many more things one has to go through while staying alone in other countries.
On the other
hand many
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hand, many
people get
use
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used
to new environment easily. For most of the individuals moving to other countries plays a vital role. It completely changes their standard of living and gives a positive impact to children. Many children mingle easily with other people and new location. In
this
case, there have numerous advantages on their lives.
For instance
, children and adults have
good opportunity
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a good opportunity
to learn new things which prepare them for their future.
Furthermore
, from my perspective going aboard can lead many advantages for a family.
For example
, they start living by their own without depending on others and started learning new technologies at work and many more new things around them. One of my best friends moved to Canada with their children and got adjusted very easily and is jubilant staying there. In conclusion, even though there are many obstacles moving to abroad, but there are always many merits for the whole family. In my opinion, I believe that moving abroad is a good choice for a person that gives many benefits to his family.
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