Consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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goods
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have become the mainstay of people’s living.  
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essay is an attempt to study the merits and demerits and provide a conclusion. In today’s
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world,
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goods
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are a boon to humanity.  
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, they are available in all categories ranging from automobiles, furniture, household appliances
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.  
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they make life easy and comfortable, they do not cost an arm and a leg and are generally affordable.  
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, one can cook up a
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meal to satisfy hunger or reach any
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place in no time by taking a vehicle or perform all household chores
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as laundry, dish cleaning, sweeping and mopping at the click of a button of the washing machine, dish cleaner, and vacuum cleaner
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.  
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,
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definitely leaves some room for an individual to pursue their hobbies or passions, which leads to better living standards.
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,
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have their drawbacks as well.  
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results in obesity and other ailments
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as cardiac problems, diabetes, joint aches, respiratory issues
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.
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, a recent study carried out in the U.S has shown that excessive use of smart devices can cause neural disorders in people as they emit harmful radio waves.
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, excessive usage of automobiles is fast depleting our natural resources
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as petrol, diesel and adding to the existing pollution levels.  In conclusion, it would be prudent to say that
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consumer
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goods
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still continue to be a boon to mankind,
its
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usage should be regulated and monitored on an individual and government level to ensure
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continues
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to be a boon and not a bane.

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overall
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structure
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea. Start with a simple sentence that states that idea, then add support.
coherence
Link ideas with clear words like also, but, for example, so that the flow is smooth.
grammar
Check small mistakes in grammar and keep plain word use. Short sentences help.
structure
Clear plan: intro, body and end are present.
coherence
Use of linking words to show addition and contrast.
Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • improved living standards
  • ease of communication
  • variety of choices
  • increased productivity
  • waste generation
  • environmental impact
  • materialistic mindset
  • financial burden
  • inequality
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