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Nowadays some parents pressure their children to be successful in a specific field

#parents #pressure #children #field
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People
 have different views about that most parents consider children should be educated and pressured by them and
that is
alternative way
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an alternative way
 to become a lucky person in
youngsters'
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youngster's
 career
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to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
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There are various positive aspects of parents' attention in the youth life
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world, therefore
therefore
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in particular
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in the childhood period
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 The youth feel frequently
diffucult
not easy; requiring great physical or mental effort to accomplish or comprehend or endure
difficult
difficulty
 to figure out the problems
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of
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requiring sitting or little activity
sedentary
 in their active life as well as modern globe
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which is
shuold
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be solved by parents pressure or their care
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Eventually
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this
 access might be significantly
increase
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increased
 efficiency of knowledge as well as to find
higher position
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a higher position
 in a job
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