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In some countries, young people often decide to work or travel for a time before they start their university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of doing this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In certain
countries youngsters
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countries, youngsters
 pursue their
university
 studies after a break. Either they opt for working or travelling before starting with their higher education
.
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.
 In
this
 essay we shall discuss the pros and cons of the same. Going
for
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to
work
 or travelling
bring
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has brought
 in a different perspective. It breaks the monotony of the cliche paths taken. Young people chose to
work
 as it helps them with the practical aspect of life. Working in a real environment helps in pushing and challenges the individual. Money earned through
work
 can help in paying
university
 fees.
Further
, several people take up travelling to explore the world and discover themselves. Goals clearly are solidified in the process of doing
this
. Thoughts are clearer, ambitious are well defined. An example from my own experience,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 worked for a year at an audit firm after my graduation
.
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.
 With the money earned and the experience gained
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 was at a better
pedestral
a support or foundation
pedestal
 than my peers for my higher
university
 studies. In the United states of America
,
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,
youngsters
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the youngsters
work
 part time and study simultaneously. In India
,
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,
 youngsters finish their education at once before pursuing anything else.
However
, young people
definitely lose
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have definitely lost
 out on the continuity in education if extensive years of
work
 or travel is taken up. Studying
,
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,
 writing for exams becomes a task in case where breaks are longer. Travelling leads to excessive spending
ultimately leads
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ultimately lead
 to trouble in paying for
university
 studies. Extensive working at a tender age leads to stress. Keeping the above discussion in mind, I would conclude by saying youngsters should consider all their options carefully before deciding on whether to take a break or to immediately take up their
university
 studies.

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