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some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals argue that the major problem associated with the ecosystem is the disappearance of specific types of flora and fauna,
whereas
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 certain others think that there are other significant issues related to the
environment
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.
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,
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 some species of animals and plants
had
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 vanished
within
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over
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the
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time which creates
problems
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 in
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life
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the life
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cycle
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, there are other significantly important
problems
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 which may be dangerous for the
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life
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lives
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 of human beings. On the one side,
disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of particular types of flora and fauna
had
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 disturbed the natural
life
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cycle
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. By
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this
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 I mean to say that when some species
became
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become
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 completely lost, there are chances of
increment
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an increment
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 in
population
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the population
a population
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 of their
preys
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prey
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.
This
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 might be not good for other small animals and
by
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in
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this
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 way, the whole
cycle
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 will be disturbed.
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, the extinction of tigers in major
part
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 of the world has become crucial and
damage
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damaged
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 the natural
life
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cycle
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around
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 10%,
according
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 a survey conducted by WHO. In my opinion,
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 problem is not significant because it does not impact
consequently
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 on the
environment
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 and there are very effective ways to preserve those animals and plants. On the other side,
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life threatening
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problems
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such
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 as global warming
has
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significant
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 impact on the
environment
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This
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 is to say that
increasing
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the increasing
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 amount
Co2
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of Co2
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 emission
have
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 raised
up
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a
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the
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 temperature level in the
environment
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 which
melts
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is melting
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south
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the south
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 and north pole’s ice caps and
ice bergs
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icebergs
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.
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, the sea level is continuously rising
up
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which leads to
drowning
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the drowning
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 of many islands. A good reference for
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 is that
,
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 Japan is sinking down 1% per year,
according to
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 researchers at Stanford University. I believe that these
problems
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 have a major effect on the future of human beings so these
problems
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 should be taken seriously. In conclusion, though, the extinction of some types of flora and fauna has an impact on the natural
life
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cycle
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 of food, other major issues
such
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 as global warming ought to be taken seriously because the future of human beings
are
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is
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 on the line.

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task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your ideas are logically organized throughout the essay.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your essay.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and use correct grammar.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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