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Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Technology
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 has evolved with mankind. Since the stone age era, inventions have been ruling the world. With companies investing huge sums of money in
technology
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,
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 let's not forget the impact of the same on the flora and fauna of the motherland. In
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 essay we shall discuss if
boom
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the boom
 in
technology
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 has been a boon or a bane
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of
 the world. The advent of
technology
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 has introduced us to laptops, computers
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 smart phones
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 cars, headphones, speakers.
Technology
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 has helped in solving environmental problems
such
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 as
watser
someone who dissipates resources self-indulgently
waster
water
 water treatment
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 plastic recycling and biodegradable composting.
Technology
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 has resulted in fuel efficient electric cars which results in less pollution. It has
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 lead to energy conversation of
teh
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the
 natural resources.
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Though
 waste water treatment the marine
ecoystem
a system formed by the interaction of a community of organisms with their physical environment
ecosystem
 is protected. Low use of CFC's in fridges and
ac's
a public promotion of some product or service
ads
uses
have resulted
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has resulted
 in
lower impact
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a lower impact
 on global warming. Technological advancement
has only lead
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has only led
 to
destruction
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the destruction
 of the environment. In conclusion,
technology
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 only has brought environmental problems
for
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in
 the world. Inadvertently
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 we cannot ignore
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 but need to be aware of the problems it brings along.
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