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The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates how many male and female workers were employed in British and Walsh
factories
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 in the years from 1851 to 1901. In general, the amount of male and female labours experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend throughout the
period
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, but the account of
factories
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 significantly increased with a fluctuating trend. At the beginning of the
period
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, there
was
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were
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 nearly half a million
of
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apply
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male (287,100) and female (190,000) employees in 225
factories
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 in England and Wales.
In contrast
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, these figures declined
into
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to
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 total, 61,000
at the end
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 of the
period
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,
however
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, the number of
factories
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 increased
almost
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by almost
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 threefolds to 600. In 1861, the
amount
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number
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 of male workers rate slightly less than females, it was 131,780 males and 160,000 females in 227
factories
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 in the given countries. After a decade, both
male
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males
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(80,123) and
female
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females
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(60,000)
less
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were less
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 than
the
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in the
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 previous
period
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, but the rate of
factories
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 increased to 622. In 1881 and 1891, the rate of male employees declined from 76,132 to 65,000
as well as
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 females
50,000
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from 50,000
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 to 40,000 in the
factories
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.
In addition
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, the number of
factories
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 in England and Wales
also
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 decreased from 722 to 625.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words factories, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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