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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A zoo has no useful purpose. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

#zoo #purpose
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Animals live around us and their importance to humans cannot be overlooked. Wildlife is part of Nature and Nature is part of life. The
zoo
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 is a dwelling
place
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 for mainly wild animals. They are kept in an enclosed housing and they serve as
tourist attraction
Suggestion
a tourist attraction
 to humans, education and relaxation
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 to human. I am
on
Suggestion
of
 the opinion that the
Zoo
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 has a useful purpose for humans
Firstly
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, the
zoo
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 serves as a tourist
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 for humans. It's a
place
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 where various people can have access to. It's a
place
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 with no religious taboo. It
support
Suggestion
supports
 tourist from all over the world
Secondly
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, the
zoo
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 is an educative environment. Visitors are educated more about the animals, their behaviours can be seen. Their lifestyles are seen compared to the wild.
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Thirdly it
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Thirdly, it
 serves as a relaxation
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 for families, colleagues, lovers.
Its
Suggestion
It's
 a
place
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 where we can enjoy and experience full nature and
this
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 helps relax the mind which is beneficial to the health. In conclusion, the
zoo
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have
Suggestion
has
 a very useful purpose to human. There will be
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in lifespan when the mind is relaxed

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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