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Five kinds of books sold by seller in the year 1972 and 2012. give your views

The bar chart illustrates housing preferences of British people's in three different cities of London, Oxford and Cambridge in the year 2005. Data is calibrated in
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. Overall, In London and Oxford cities, maximum number of people's like to live in flats as compared to other cities. But in Cambridge people liked Detached houses to stay. Rest two houses, Terraced
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 and Semi-detached
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 were least preferable by the British citizens. In the year 2012, In London, flats liked by people as a living place accounted for 60% and which was twofold that of Oxford and threefold that of Cambridge people's. The remaining
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percentage
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 has been just below 20% in London.
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, in Oxford, there was a slight difference in the
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 of Flats, Detached and Semi-detached
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 and its preferable
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 was below 30% in the year 2012. In all cities of UK, below 20% people like to live in Terraced
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. Detached Houses were very popular among the Cambridge pupils with the
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 of 35 and only 10% people's in London like to stay in
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 kind of
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. Only 30% people's in both Oxford and Cambridge city liked to settle on the Semi-Detached
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.

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