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Some people think that environment problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Environment issues are undoubtedly a topic of global importance. Being the most powerful living organism, it should be our
first
 priority.
However some
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However, some
 people find it more effective to deal with these problems nationally. In my opinion, I believe it should be solved on a global scale keeping in mind all the local factors. Environmental hazards
such
 as Global warming, Green house effect and climate change are threats for over seven billion people living across borders. In
this
senario
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
, it is very important for all the countries
to come
Suggestion
come
 up together
againt
in contact with
against
 these problems.
However
, some people support the fact that environmental problems should be dealt nationally as each nation has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own demography, ideology and notions.
having
Suggestion
Having
 national policies will enable citizens to easily adapt and contribute to ways of dealing with these hazards. In my opinion, the fight against environmental issues should be dealt with globally as it's a common problem of all
nationalaties
people having common origins or traditions and often comprising a nation
nationalities
.
However
, there should be
lineanty
tolerant or lenient
lenient
 given to individual nations to implement their own ways considering their local factors. To conclude, problems of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 are the problems of each individual of mother nature.
Therefore
 problems as
such
 should be seen from a global
perspective considering
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perspective, considering
 all associated local factors.
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