Topic: some people think studying abroad is good. Other people think studying abroad is bad. How do you think?

At
present time
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the present time
, with the help of technology, myriad chances are provided to many students in developing countries to meet
advanced education
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the advanced education
in oversea. Most of people
have burning
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were burning
have been burnt
have been burned
were burned
have burnt
have burned
desire to study abroad with the hope of better
life
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life, although
although
they can encounter with difficulties.
Firstly
, studying in abroad becomes a dream of many individuals in
educational
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educating
society because of external influence and their perceptions. As most of liberal people have
wider scoop
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a wider scope
a wider scoop
of vision in promoting their life better, they claim that upgraded education system in foreign can improve their personal development to get
greater chance
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a greater chance
of job opportunities. The experience of self-dependence, communication and
organization
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organizational
skill that received during oversea study will be a lot of help in their career pathways.
On the other hand
, people want to go to abroad and continue their study due to increase their dignity in current social circle without thinking much about drawbacks they will be
faced
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facing
.
Language barrier
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The language barrier
and
culture
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cultural
differences are the
first
thing they will meet. The feeling of loneliness can lead to depression, anxiety and even home-sick. Because of
unfamiliar education plan
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the unfamiliar education plan
, failure
can
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can also occur
also
occurs. All in all, studying in foreign countries not only give us large
advantage but
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advantage, but
also
serious disadvantage so
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a serious disadvantage, so
a serious disadvantage so
serious disadvantages so
we used to prepare our best before leaving our
countries
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country
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • personal development
  • multilingualism
  • cross-cultural competence
  • academic excellence
  • global marketplace
  • financial constraint
  • culture shock
  • social integration
  • educational disparities
  • brain drain
  • homesickness
  • networking
  • adaptability
  • resilience
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