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History tells that people have afternoon thought about creating and ideal society, but, most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society? how can we create an ideal society?

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As history tells us that people in the past dreams of building a better environment, but, it didn’t push through as of
this
 day. My opinions of an ideal society
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are
 peaceful, where we can walk in the streets without fear of being
rob
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robbed
, rape or killed, even in the wee hours. Clean environment, because, it creates fresh air
that is
 good for our lungs. The
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 can enjoy playing outside without us worrying that they will get sick. Creating a better place to live in is, we must be responsible enough as private citizens In our actions daily., be as simple as throwing the rubbish into the rubbish bin. The government should make an effort to reach out the people and explain the importance of having a good/ peaceful
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a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
 to stay
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