The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The charts illustrate the main goals and locations of
people
aged between 20 and 50 reported by a survey. The bar chart provides details about the 5 main aims (recreation, muscle toning, weight loss, disease prevention and mood improvement) of working out,
whereas
the pie chart shows percentages of 5 different locations for exercising.
Overall
, the primary goal of
people
doing exercise is to recover.
In contrast
, only a minority of
people
reported
to get
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active to improve their mood or lose weight.
Besides
, the most frequently visited location is the gym, but public venues, playgrounds and other places are
also
quite popular with a combined percentage of over two
fifth
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. In terms of objectives, recreation is the main goal for two
fifth
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of all
people
,
while
around
one quarter
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does sports to tone their muscles and define their body. Weight loss, disease prevention and mood improvement motivate
people
the least, with all three aims ranging between 10 and around 14%.
Furthermore
, the most popular location to sweat is the gym with 35%, followed by the park with 20% of
people
going there. Public sports venues, playgrounds and other places are similar in popularity with 15% each.
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