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Some people think that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Any person who is born with certain qualities might differ from
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other counterparts. Some are of the view that nature has equipped males with better than the other gender
such
 as females. I certainly assert
this
 opinion as
men
 have been created with more physical and emotional endurance.
To begin
 with, more physical strength has
given
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 to
men
 by
mother nature
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 which makes them better than females in certain areas.
This
 means males are empowered by strong bones and muscles which enable them to carry out work which demands
considerable
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 amount of physical
efforts
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.
Additionally
, they can easily continue or execute the task for stretched hours without even taking a break.
For example
,
men
 can usually be seen working
as
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 a mansion or drivers which needs physical resilience, and often eat or take a break when they finish the task.
Furthermore
, most
of
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the
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men
 are gifted by nature with the mental power which
enable
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 them to handle any sort of emotional situation.
This
 means they can combat almost any depressed emotional feelings by applying their rational approach and
safeguard
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 themselves from any mental psychological traumas.
For example
, when a man faces any hard situation in life,
such
 as losing
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parents
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 or getting divorced, they usually
tackle
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 the same with more ease comparatively than women.
To conclude
, every person is different in terms of natural qualities which is why
men
 are superlative than women as they possess high physical and mental capabilities.
Thus
, they often handle almost every tough situation using their physical capacity and by applying rational thinking.

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