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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individual and society?

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Every person
need
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needs
 to get good sleep to have a healthy life. In
this
 modern era we are facing lot of distraction and leading to lack of sleep. These days we find several people suffering with Insomnia and leading an unhealthy life. In
this
 essay will discuss about the sleep pattern and its consequences. Due to rapid competition and
work
 pressure people are unable to keep up
there
of them or themselves
their
work
 life balance.
Although
 there are several facilities to ease our
work
 still we are lacking the minimum time of sleep. It is believed that in comparison to
earlier time
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an earlier time
earlier times
, we tend to have less physical exercise and spend most of the time sitting in between four walls of the office. People use their electronic gadgets before going to bed, due to the mobile screen rays, we
loos
grant freedom to; free from confinement
loose
 our sleep.
Hence
 we find it difficult to fall asleep early. It is indeed true that an individual who has a sufficient sleep will deliver
a
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an
 efficient and productive results at
work
 place. The lack of sleep will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the output of the employee and
resultingly
 impacts the memory. The growth of an Individual and society as a whole will have a great impact. Good Sleep has several health benefits. It has
an
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a
 major role
on
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in
growth
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the growth
 and development of the economy.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 has a prime role in
over all
involving only main features
overall
develoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
. In consideration of all factors, Sleep plays a vital role. In
absence
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the absence
 of the proper sleep, there are several
disadvantage
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disadvantages
 which
has
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have
 long lasting impact on health, Insomnia and
memory
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the memory
 of the individual.
Hence
 good exercise and avoidance of gadgets can help to have a good sleep.

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