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There are increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

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Of late, it is
become
Suggestion
becoming
 increasingly common to have an elementary family over the extended family. Having a small family would certainly bring more benefits, but there will
also
 be some drawbacks, which are going to examine in the ensuing paragraphs, followed by a logical conclusion. On positive aspects, parents are greatly benefitted by a small family.
That is
 to say, the expenditure
that is
 imperative for nurturing a kid from cradle to university,
such
 as
schoolbooks
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school books
, uniform and other amenities reduce to a greater degree.
Therefore
, a family of one or two children experiences less strain
economically
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economical
 when compared to those having more than two children.
Furthermore
, a nuclear family plays a crucial role in preventing the environment.
For instance
, the global warming owing to human activities ceases if a breadwinner of a family is restricted to one or two kids.
Although
 the advantages of a conjugal family are predominantly high, yet there are certain disadvantages.
First
 off, a small family makes parents overprotective and excessively attentive. In other word, a
parents
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parent
 having sole child becomes over caring who don’t allow playing or exploring.
As a result
, children
becomes
Suggestion
become
 solitaire and fragile.
Additionally
, there is no proper medical attention in a small family. If the only kid becomes sick, there will not be any family member to look after him or her when his/her parents are working. To recapitulate, a growing number of nuclear
family
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families
 possess various sorts of benefits like better life quality for parents and
children whereas
Accept comma addition
children, whereas
 the negative effects for the same include downfall of the kid health due to possessive love.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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