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Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

Since
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last
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 many years, the world has been facing a plethora of environmental issues. So, it is commonly believed that the
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earth
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Earth
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 can only be saved if efforts are made internationally.
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, I think that we can start saving the
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earth
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 individually
as well as
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 nationally.
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 with, the moot issue of most of the environmental issues,
such
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 as the greenhouse effect, depletion of the ozone layer and pollution, is
the
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deforestation. It is the responsibility of any
country
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's authority to maintain the ecological balance
while
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 progressing.
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, in Germany, there is a stringent rule of planting saplings if people need to cut down any tree for some specific reason
and
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, and
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 if anyone
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is unable
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 to do so, he/she may be
penalized
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penalised
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by
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with
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 a
big
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large
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 amount.
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, people can start protecting the
earth
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by
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on
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 their own.
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, an increase in unbridled vehicles makes the situation worse. The more vehicles the
country
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 has, the more polluted it is.
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, there must be some legal control over the number of automobiles in the
country
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.
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,
Singapore
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the Singapore
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 government annually allows only ten thousand
of
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apply
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new vehicles in the
country
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.
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apply
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, which helps the
country
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 to save
no-renewable
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non-renewable
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 fossil fuels and
hence
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 the environment.
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, citizens of any nation should be aware
to make
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of making
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 their surroundings clean.
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, to see the impact globally, efforts to be made individually to make the
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earth
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Earth
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more
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a more
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liveable
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livable
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 place. The earlier people
realize
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realise
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this
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, the better it is for them
as well as
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 their posterity. So, understanding the value of
the
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nature and
save
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saving
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 it
,
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apply
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 is the need of the day.

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph clearly supports your main argument. Some points need clearer links to the main idea.
cohesion
Use a variety of linking words to improve the flow of your essay, such as 'furthermore', 'in addition', and 'however'.
content
You provided specific examples of Germany and Singapore, which strengthen your argument.
structure
Your conclusion summarizes your main points well.
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