The obesity rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

The Obesity rates among teenagers have dramatically increased in

developed

Suggestion

developing

countries due to sophisticated lifestyle, less physical activity, irregularity in consuming healthy food. The overall development in the field of food industry, transport leads to poor intake of home food and luxury in travel. There is not much awareness of physical fitness among teenagers. Technology has

also

played its part in it through video games, surfing, entertainment channels and so on.Lack of physical activity leads to increase in the obesity rates of teenagers.

However

, some change their lifestyle into a healthy living by choosing the sport they need. Awareness in leading a healthy mental and physical is important. Schools can play a major part in creating a curriculum exclusive for physical and sport training. Teenagers

should be lead

Suggestion

should lead

should be led

in a proper way of healthy eating. They should be given awareness

Suggestion

the causes of obesity. Developed countries should take the responsibility in saving their teenagers through appropriate actions.

Mon Sep 23 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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