The obesity rates among teenagers have increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

The Obesity rates among teenagers have dramatically increased in
developed
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developing
countries due to sophisticated lifestyle, less physical activity, irregularity in consuming healthy food. The overall development in the field of food industry, transport leads to poor intake of home food and luxury in travel. There is not much awareness of physical fitness among teenagers. Technology has
also
played its part in it through video games, surfing, entertainment channels and so on.Lack of physical activity leads to increase in the obesity rates of teenagers.
However
, some change their lifestyle into a healthy living by choosing the sport they need. Awareness in leading a healthy mental and physical is important. Schools can play a major part in creating a curriculum exclusive for physical and sport training. Teenagers
should be lead
Suggestion
should lead
should be led
in a proper way of healthy eating. They should be given awareness
in
Suggestion
of
the causes of obesity. Developed countries should take the responsibility in saving their teenagers through appropriate actions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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