Why do I celebrate my birthday and how I celebrate my birth day

I b
one
brought into existence
born
on 2007 February 13th. I celebrate my b
irth
an anniversary of the day on which a person was born (or the celebration of it)
birthday
day
because I come to
this
world on that
day
. My father and my mother were very happy
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And my grandmother
also
. Now I am 12 years old.a
t
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In
At
For
this
year I celebrated my b
irth
an anniversary of the day on which a person was born (or the celebration of it)
birthday
day
with my family members and my friends. That
day
we played l
ot.
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lots
My mother made lots of sweets
,
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,
rolls, cutlets, drinks and many other things. We went to c
ake shop
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the cake shop
and we bought a beautiful chocolate icing cake before the party. Parents organized the party at the home. I had many gifts from them. I was surprised look them. Special gift from my loving n
anga
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Nanga
Managua
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We
enjoyed that party time. Thanks for these my family members.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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