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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#country #health #service #treatments
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Now a days
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Nowadays
 each and every
country providing
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country, providing
 free
health
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 service due to everyone
health
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 is important. Most of the latest medical services are too expensive due to these services not available for medical treatments.
we
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We
 will discuss more
indetail
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in detail
 in later view. According to doctors says, due to the weather
changes increasing
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changes, increasing
 the
health
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 conditions of the human life is
deteriating
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorating
. For
this
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conditions
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condition
 most of the treatment is
high
Suggestion
highly
 expensive due to availability of the latest
equipements
an instrumentality needed for an undertaking or to perform a service
equipment
.
For
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example cancer
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example, cancer
 patients are increased like anything now a days. The treatment for
this
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cheamo
engraving or carving in low relief on a stone (as in a brooch or ring)
cameo
 is too expensive. These services are not available most of the
government
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 hospitals. You need to go for cancer hospital or multi speciality hospitals and fees are very high for each sitting. When equipments are too expensive,
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government
Suggestion
the government
 will purchase and
equiped
provided or fitted out with what is necessary or useful or appropriate
equipped
 in
government
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 hospitals, so middle class and below middle class people will not spend more amount
for
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of
 treatments. Each country has
there
of them or themselves
their
 own medical policies and revise those every
year
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year's
 budget and spend more money on
health
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 services. In the conclusion, I disagree for the statement due to
people
Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
health
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 is important to
government
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 and has to spend more money on medical equipments and give services to people.
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