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Governments prohibiting the underage children for getting full-time jobs in certain countries. Do you agree or disagree?

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Child
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 has always been a heated concern across the globe. It is believed that adolescents should not be allowed to do full-time jobs in different countries and the
government
 should enforce strict laws in
this
 regard. I completely agree that the
government
 should play its pivotal role as working full-time certainly has negative impacts. I shall elaborate my point of view with valid arguments and examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, predominantly, child labour is increasing at an alarming rate, particularly in underdeveloped countries like India & Pakistan. Children are forced to do work in order to support their families. By
government
 intervention, children would be given the opportunity to take out time for studies
to pursue
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pursue
 their dream careers. According to the recent research, 50% of adolescents in India do full-time jobs and do not go to the school at all. To elucidate my stance
further
,
government
 ban on full-time jobs can prevent children physical and mental fatigue. Child
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 dilemma has detrimental effects on adolescents mental & physical growth. Owing to the low literacy rate, they are given
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 work that requires a lot of physical fatigue. These children suffer from fatal diseases like asthma, TB and cancer. Short term jobs can benefit children in taking care of themselves alongside helping their families to earn bread and butter. A study from London University shown that children working full-time in factories are 60% more inclined to get affected by incurable diseases like HIV or TB. In a nutshell, it is of paramount importance that the
government
 prohibit adolescents to do full-time work.
This
 imposes will certainly bring a positive change not only
on
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in
for
teenagers life but
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a teenager's life, but
a teenager's life but
teenager's life but
the teenager's life but
also
 in the society altogether.

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