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Some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the contemporary world, more than half of the population is suffering from hunger and poverty. Some people are saying that the rapid growth of the economic development is the only way to end
this
 situation while others are arguing that
this
 should be stopped immediately as it’s destructing the environment. Following essay will discuss both aspects of
this
 argument and outline my opinion on
this
 matter.
To begin
 with, economic boost shows a certain country’s wealth,
hence
 it’s really important for everyone in the country.. Proliferation of economic growth will mitigate unemployment,
hence
 it will boost people’s standards of living.
For example
, most of the developing countries are suffering from hunger and poverty, the only way to diminish
this
 problem is that the authorities should take necessary actions to bring up the country’s economy up to a standard where no one can suffer without having basic necessities.
On the other hand
, rapid growth of a nation could bring detrimental impacts to the environment.
For instance
, waste comes out from industrial zones increases greenhouse gas emission which will be a direct impact to the global warming. Contemporary climate change situations throughout the globe is one good example of
this
 state
therefore
this
 should be stopped. In conclusion, even though the tremendous commercial boost can end hunger and poverty of a nation, I strongly believe that the governments should take necessary steps to minimize or prevent side effects which could happen along with
this
 as
that is
 how a country can protect the environment while improving their economy up.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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