Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility in universities difficult. Do agree or not!

Now a
days
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day
it is quite widely discussed
matter that to get
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that matter to get
admission
in universities has become cumbersome for
poor
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the poor
as well as wealthy students.
This
problem
is getting
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gets
worse day by day as the tendency of tough competition in the academic department has become
core hindrance
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a core hindrance
for most of the rich and poor pupils. According to my verdict our future stars should not face any
difficult
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difficulties
while getting
admission
in
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into
their desired universities regardless their academic background.There are
number
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a number
of reasons that contribute to adopt
such
type of criteria by the universities
Firstly
,
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universities have
certain number
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a certain number
of seats to cope any specific study area, so they have to maintain quite competitive criteria that relate to only
students'high
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students' high
grade in previous educational data.e.
g
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mostly top universities in Pakistan offer
admission
with minimum 90+ percentage
.
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.
This
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These
Those
criteria
is spreading
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are spreading
pessimistic approach towards education among students.
Secondly
,
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,
admission
in any department is based on
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
future demand in practical life because
government
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the government
has to generate
jobs
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job
opportunities for degree holder of that department
.
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.
Thirdly
, many universities want to establish their name on the base of their top academic results
,
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,
consquently
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consequently
,
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,
they give importance to highly genius students. There
are
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is
a wide range of
drabacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
to make difficult to get
admission
in universities for both rich and poor students
.
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.
e.
g it
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Git
G it
is not necessary that students with high grade are only proved beneficial for society
,
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,
many average students can perform better as practical worker, many
scientist
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scientists
were not brilliant students but they did wonders in their interested academic departments.
Furthermore
, many students began to perform better in their higher education period. To conclude, we can say that by providing
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an equal chance
to every individual to select their required field in their urged universities can polish up their superficial as well as hidden skilled pearls
.
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.

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