Many offices authorities impose a restriction on smoking within the office premises. Some governments have even banned smoking in all public places. This is a good idea but it takes away some of our freedom. Do you agree or disagree that this is the right of course. Give reason for your opinion.

I agree on that, so several offices command imposes a banner on smoking under the office premises. While many
government
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governments
have even restricted smoking in all common places. So, smoking is a bad habit and
this
is very bad of his body. Which people are
addicts
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addicted
often
such
as people will be
heart attack
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a heart attack
. So,
Government
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the Government
should be banned smoking.
First
of all, the smoking is very dangerous for people. Often, the
smoker
is made of cancer patient, heart patient and a kidney patient. People should be able to itself that banned smoking on his-self.
Secondly
, when if
smoker
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a smoker
the smoker
is smoking within the office so, effect on other people. Young people, are learning a smoking from
smoker
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the smoker
a smoker
and adult people are heart for smoking.
Then
,
lastly that
Accept comma addition
lastly, that
people with
smoker
. Often, smoking is dangerous for several offices. Because, that offices dangerous for accident.
For example
,
patrol
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petrol
pumps,
cng
pumps etc. That's why
government
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the government
should be banned smoking. So
government
banned smoking. So, common people will be very
benifits
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benefitting
benefits
.
Secondly
, I
am discuss
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am discussing
have discussed
am to discuss
about smoking public places. Smoking should be not allowed
on
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in
common places. Because, often people
elergy
hypersensitivity reaction to a particular allergen; symptoms can vary greatly in intensity
allergy
energy
allergic
from smoking and
this
is not
good habit
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a good habit
of
smoker
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smoking
. If
smoker
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a smoker
the smoker
is sitting between
to
being one more than one
two
other people. So, it looks he is smoking himself. But not himself Rather other people are smoking because of
this
. Should be banned on the side of
government
. Our freedom is
not effecting to
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not effecting
her. To conclude, smoking should be banned whether within office or public places. Because, it is
also
dangerous for
dieseases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
and
dangersou
the condition of being susceptible to harm or injury
dangers
dangerous
for
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of
accidents in several offices. Even though it is very dangerous
for
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in
public places.
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