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Some people think that illegal Internet downloads are having a negative effect on the music industry. Others feel that they have little or no impact on artists. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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A generation ago people are lining-up to their nearest audio store to buy the latest album of their favourite artist. Nowadays, illegal downloading of songs or albums from the internet has become a trend.
Although
 some people believe that these activities won’t affect the artist, I think that it will impact the music industry negatively.
On the other hand
, it still a discussion that artist will not be financially affected by illegal downloads. Some people believe that they have multiple source of income.
For instance
, they have these concert tours, television guesting and endorsements.
Therefore
, as long as people continue listening to them either legal or illegal means, they still be famous and able to earn their living somewhere else.
On the other hand
, I believe that
this
 will significantly affect the music sector as a whole. In my opinion, a lot of production studios may not be sustainable if consumers do not pay for their products. Recordings incur high production costs because it involves many professionals
such
 as singers and composers. If they do not have enough compensation due to illegal downloading, they will not be able to survive in
this
 competitive market in the long term. I
also
 think that
this
 will discourage them to spend hours on creating good music for their audience. They may feel that their songs are not appreciated and
therefore
, de-motivated to continue composing wonderful songs and quit their jobs. In conclusion,
although
 many artists do not rely only on one source of income, I still believe that downloading online without paying for it will cause the whole industry to slow down and production studios will not survive in the future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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