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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #buildings
Generally speaking, it has been argued by a number of people that monumental structures be demolished to give way to the construction of new ones. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
 argument as I see preserving famous structures as being an evidence of our cultural heritage and
also
 a means of revenue to the government. One reason why I disagree with the view of erecting new buildings in place of old ones is that ancient structures are proofs of our various cultures. They help us
rember
recall knowledge from memory; have a recollection
remember
 our roots by the tales that surround their existence.
Moreover
, these tales have been passed down from one generation to
another
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another, thus
thus
, helping to reflect, preserve and maintain our heritage.
However
, destroying these landmarks will only aid in the possibility of faded histories.
For example
, in Nigeria, the popular
badagry
 slave house has been kept over the years and
this
 house holds stories and myths about the slave trade which are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 told to people. Another reason for disagreeing with the view is that ancient structures can be an avenue for the government to make
additonal
further or added
additional
 revenue.
This
 is by making these historical sites become tourist centres which will definitely attract people from all over the world who will be more than willing to pay any fee levied to access them.
For example
, the famous Egyptian pyramid that has been in existence for centuries attracts
miilions
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
millions
million
 of people yearly. Sales of entry tickets
from
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for
 tourist add immensely to the national income of Egypt. To sum up, the benefits of keeping old structures
such
 as it addition to governmental revenue and it
being
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is
 an evidence for cultural existence are reasons why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 strongly
dis agree
be of different opinions
disagree
 to their replacement with modern buildings.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
  • green technologies
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