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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns ,leaving only old people in the countryside, what problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

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Nowadays, more and more youngsters are moving from rural areas to urban areas in search of better jobs and lifestyle leaving their old parents behind.
This
 essay will discuss the problems related to
this
 move and will
also
 suggest an appropriate solution.
To begin
 with, youngsters are moving to urban areas in search of better education and job opportunities which they cannot find in rural areas. In cities, there are good universities which will give them better education and improved career prospects.
Also
, plenty of jobs are available in cities.
This
 is the predominant reason young people prefer towns to villages. Unfortunately,
this
 migration causes a lot of hardship to seniors who are left behind. They have no one to take care of them when they need support the most.
Consequently
, many aged people are now seeking admission in old age homes where they may or may not receive adequate care.
This
 problem can be solved if governments create higher educational institutions and job opportunities in rural areas.
As a result
 of
this
, more people will prefer to stay in their villages. The government should sign contracts with big companies for creating job opportunities in villages /rural areas. To sum up, old people play a crucial role in our society as their knowledge and experience can help a society grow and leaving them alone will lead to several problems. The government can tackle
this
 problem by creating more opportunities for younger generation living in rural areas.
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