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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three diagrams show how Queen Mary Hospital developed from 1960 to 2000. In 1960, Queen Mary
Hospitals
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Hospital
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 consisted of four main buildings. The hospital and The Shopping
Centre
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 were located on the main road,
while
Linking Words
 Farmland and Car Park were located
on
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at
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 the backside. In 1980, The Shopping
Centre
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 was replaced by two buildings. The Hospital building was enlarged and a Pharmacy was built in the same building. The Cancer
Centre
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 was built
next
Linking Words
 to The pharmacy. The Farmland was replaced by a Nursing School. In 2000, Queen Mary Hospital had the same buildings as it did in 1980. The Cancer
Centre
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 was extended south and took some
area
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 from The Nursing School. The Nursing School
area
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 became smaller in 2000 than it was in 1980. The Car Park
area
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also
Linking Words
 became smaller in 2000 than it was in 1980. The changes in the
area
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 were in
favor
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favour
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 of the Cancer
Centre
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 , which was enlarged dramatically.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial facilities
  • replacement
  • significant extension
  • absorbed
  • developments
  • introduction
  • adjacent
  • evolution
  • enhancing healthcare services
  • commercial spaces
  • medical facilities
  • expansion
  • modern healthcare needs
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