It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

History
is an important subject at school. Some people
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prompt
the
ideal
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idea
that local
history
plays more important role
compare
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comparable
to the world
history
. In my opinion, I
am partially disagree
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partially disagree
am partially disagreeing
have partially disagreed
with
this
. National
history
benefits
schoolchildren
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school children
in various ways. The countries’
history
tell
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tells
the kids about its origin, explain how people lived in the past, what people have done in certain historical events. All of the local historic facts contribute to the national culture. Learning the
history
of the kids’
country not
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country, not
only acknowledges them about the
events but
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events, but
also
explains to them some of cultural
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an inherited pattern of thought or action
traditions
tradition
.
For example
, the
occurance
an event that happens
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of
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In addition
, the pass
history
will enhance the national pride
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of
the children, which keep the
chidren
a young person of either sex
children
love their country more. From historical events, children learn about the
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an inherited pattern of thought or action
tradition
traditions
traditional
and dignity of their ancestor, and continue keeping as
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well as
developing them.
Vietnamese traddition
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The Vietnamese tradition
Vietnamese tradition
Vietnamese traditions
of tacking foreign enemies has been
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preserved
throught
all the way through
throughout
through
out the period of building and protecting the countries, and nowadays,
the young
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the younger
generation
are taught
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is taught
and keep the pride of the
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consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
tradition
. Worldwide
history
,
on the other hand
,
can not
can not
cannot
be underestimated. Learning what happened around the world helps us explain some event, as a
results
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result
, the interaction between countries and inside the nation itself.
For instance
, the global colonisation happened due to the economical crisis is among the Western countries.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, studying about the past broaden our
mind
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minds
in understanding other countries past, which strengthen solidarity amongst the nations. In conclusion, the local
history
is essential for every
children
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child
in a country, but
can not
can not
cannot
deny the importance the world
history
in children’s education.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • heritage
  • cultural identity
  • ancestry
  • traditions
  • globalization
  • empathy
  • contemporary issues
  • integrate
  • perspective
  • civilization
  • diversity
  • innovations
  • historical significance
  • nationalism
  • cosmopolitanism
  • historiography
  • geopolitical
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