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Most scientific inventions and discoveries are worthless and only waste time and money resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

#inventions #discoveries #waste #time #money #resources
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Scientific discoveries and innovations are undisputed facts which played a pivotal role in the development of society since long
time
. According to some most of the scientific work seems as futile, and it just do waste money and valuable
time
. I agree
to
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with
this
 statement to a certain extent. In the following paragraphs I intend to point out
the
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The
 relevant reason in support of
this
 matter and conclude with my personal perception.
To begin
 with there are multiple reasons to say about some science inventions are unworthy.
Firstly
, many inventions were found
failed
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to fail
in
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at
 the
first
time
 and a lion portion of
fund
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funds
a fund
the fund
 spent for that. For
instanc
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
, some satellites launching were unsuccessful like Chdrayan 2.India
.
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
 India spent a huge amount of money for that
,
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,
 eventually it has become
totally failure
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a total failure
total failure
.
This
 amount can spend for other vulnerable areas
.
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.
Therefore some
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Therefore, some
 people think it would
lost
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lose
 capital.
Nevertheless
, there are myriads of benefits associated with scientific investigations.
Firstly
,
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,
one of the main merits of cutting edge of technology is Introduction of Internet. To be specific, World Wide Web plays a cardinal role in every aspect of human life
.
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.
 Beside
,
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,
it paves the way for globalisation.To cite an example, a survey report from Stanford University reveals that, more than 80 % of development has happened in
development
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developing
developed
nations mainly
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nations, mainly
 due the
straneous
characterized by or performed with much energy or force
strenuous
 effort of scientists from various sectors
such
 as
medical feild
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the medical field
medical field
,
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,
Information
,
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,
technology and so on
.
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.
 Thereby no one can ignore the paramount factors of science and technology
.
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 To conclude, what is apparent is that,
however
, it has some sorts of demerits like wastage of wealth and
time
, its plethora of advantages cannot be ignored
such
 as online facilities, trade marketing, medicines and the like.
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