many people are spending a lot of money on their weddings. do you think is a good thing?

Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
people spend a huge amount of money in order to have a lavish wedding.
Although
it has some advantages, I believe that
this
phenomenon will burden families' financially. There are several reasons why it could be argued that having a large wedding will be a bad thing.
Firstly
, many people show each other that they are wealthy,
for example
, they
buying
Suggestion
are buying
buy
a lot of goods to
such
occasion and
prepar
make ready or suitable or equip in advance for a particular purpose or for some use, event, etc
prepare
prepared
a plenty types of foods and
desirts
a dish served as the last course of a meal
desserts
. In
such
circumstances, the family will spend above expectations in order to imprint a
weathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
wealthy
status.
Also
,
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
such
family would take a mortgage from a bank to cover the
requierments
required activity
requirements
requirement
for
this
lavish wedding, which may have a great impact on their budget. They should buy a useful things
instead
such
as home
electronic
Suggestion
electronics
goods and
badgets
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
.
Furthermore
, inappropriate planning for
such
occasion and the higher
expendeture
money paid out; an amount spent
expenditure
expenditures
from
Suggestion
for
families
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
while
lead to fall in debts, which need
long period
Suggestion
a longer period
longer period
to finish and return to the healthy
stats
the relative position or standing of things or especially persons in a society
status
states
.
In addition
, all of the above arguments could be
as a result
of what's called 'Families'
competites'
the contestant you hope to defeat
competitors
completes
the phenomenon that have been increased gradually in the modern societies, for
instatn
Suggestion
an instant
instant
, when a family spend on their wedding an extreme budget, their relatives and
nighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
will try to imitate them or even spend more. In conclusion, after a careful analysis
fo
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
this
phenomenon, I believe that expensive
cermonies
a formal event performed on a special occasion
ceremonies
mean
an
Suggestion
a
deficit budget and negative results on the societies. They could have proper benefit from
this
huge
losed
no longer in your possession or control; unable to be found or recovered
lost
loses
lose
money on wedding occasion
instead
.
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