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Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students.

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Computers are everywhere and very popular nowadays. It is widely used in almost every aspect of
or
of or belonging to us
our
 life.
Thus
, it should be
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 and included in academia.
However
, there are certain disadvantages that can be seen if teaching will be solely dependent on computers. Given
this
 scenario, how would one
use
computers carefully
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computers, carefully
 so as not to impose
such
 dangers related to dependency?
This
 essay will discuss both sides and opinion as to using the computers in moderately manner will be elaborated. Introducing computers and their designed programs can help a student a lot in all
aspect
Suggestion
aspects
 of his life. Nowadays, we are surrounded by technology and we don’t want to be left with curiosity. Teaching with the help of computers can make the life of a professor easier. It has programs
that
is
Suggestion
are
 very beneficial like power point, Microsoft excel and many more, that they can
use
 as a tool for their presentations. Even in research, students can easily
use
 the computers in researching a certain topic. They can
use
 the computer to access the web in almost everything they want to know in relation to their subject
On the other hand
, too much dependence on computer in teaching poses risk to students. They will be accustomed to technology and will start to disregard reading books. Books are essential and should not be removed as part of education.
Library
Suggestion
The library
 will not be visited anymore,
therefore
 making students lax. We should still
use
 manual teaching in schools so that if there will come a time that computer will fail us, we always have a backup. In conclusion, Computer should be integrated
in
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into
 teaching in the
academia but
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academia, but
 since there is a risk attached to students with
dependency
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dependants
 to it, it should be
use
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used
 in moderation.

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