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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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Immigration has affected the society in various ways, people leave their
country
 to another for various reasons which will be discussed in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, one of the major reasons why people migrate is to have access to better
quality
 of
life
. Statistics show that a large number of people from underdeveloped
country
 moved out of their
country
 on a yearly basis in search of better living.
In other words
,
although
 not only do people from underdeveloped countries tend to relocate to western world every year for improved
quality
 of
life but
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life, but
also
 so they can have better paying jobs especially in countries that are more economically stable and with
low unemployment rate
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a low unemployment rate
.
In addition
, people
also
 migrate in order to gain access to better
quality
 education as well as good health care system and improved
life
quality
 as a whole.
For instance
, three years
ago my
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ago, my
 family and I decided to migrate from Nigeria to Australia to get
better
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a better quality education
quality
 education for our children.
Migration
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Migration, however
however
,
also
 has its drawbacks, as people experience both psychological and
emotion
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emotional
 effects of migrating to a new
country
. Generally speaking, most Migrants face a lot of discrimination,
that is
 to say, when they go to another
country
, they sometimes are
threated
subjected to a physical (or chemical) treatment or action or agent
treated
 as
second
 class citizens and unfairly because they are not originally from the same
country
 as them and
therefore
 are not given equal opportunity as the citizens of that nation and
this
 is turn affect their emotions and
consequently
 lead to psychological effects on them
.
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.
 In conclusion
,
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,
 even though people generally migrate so that they can have a good
life
 experience and access to better amenities, there are
also
 some downsides of
this
actions
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action
,
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,
as they may experience some disappointments if their expectation isn’t met.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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