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Nowadays, many people buy household goods (like television, rice cookers etc). Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Buying new materials for our homes has become the norm in many households. So many individuals these days spend their
money
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 in order to get more and more materialistic things
for
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in
 their living places.
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 essay will discuss the impact of
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immature selfish
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immature, selfish
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 in detail. The amount of wasted
money
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 spent every year to own unneeded stuff is surreal. While people could use their income wisely to really benefit from it, they would unfortunately rather spend it in impractical things they might not even use in their homes, nor any other place, which surely becomes a financial issue in the long run.
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, recent studies
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have shown
 that people’s ability of controlling their own
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money logically
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money, logically
 had decreased in the
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 ten years. Is short, people should really consider educating themselves to be good users of
money
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 of obsessively buying unnecessary goods. People could easily get distracted from developing their beneficial skills/habits partly attributed to being too busy buying new things for their homes. Having no time-management skills could be a reason why people
tend buy
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tend to buy
 more and more things without valuing their time. If people take time to be grateful bout what they already have and use their
money
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 and time powers to better themselves by buy self-development books, attending classes that are
money
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-saving related
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 of the regular act of going home shopping every weekend, they would definitely be better versions of themselves. Being better humans means being better consumers.
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 essay discussed the main two negative aspects of buying household things, which as mentioned are wasting more
money
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, and being too busy buying that people tend to not
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be
 able better themselves. In my pinion, people should work on themselves to break the old habits and to gain more positive ones to get rid of selfish
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
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