In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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In recent years rural-urban migration is increasing around the world.Some people believe

this

is because urban areas have more infrastructure and better job opportunities compared to rural areas.

Although

this

can be a good move

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it causes overpopulation and more pollution in cities. One of the main reasons why there is a

movement

in the direction of urban areas is the well developed infrastructure that it offers.

This

is because most modern technologies are located in these areas

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hence

internet may

also

be faster

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which makes the city more lucrative as we are moving towards the internet of things

era

a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters

are

.Industrialisation attracts rural labour

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cities as they seek higher wages in the industry sector.Evidently

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the headquarters of most companies

are located

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is located

in urban

areas

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areas, for

for example

the browsing giant Google.

However

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this

movement

has some drawbacks.Overpopulation is one of the concerns.It is believed that some families end up sharing small spaces that are meant for bachelors

therefore

resulting in too many people in some suburbs.

Furthermore

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a population

movement

can

also

cause strain on the environment.

For example

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more people means more cars that emit carbon dioxide leading to global warming. In conclusion

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there is a

movement

from the countryside to the urban areas due to infrastructure and more desirable livelihood

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but they are

also

negative effects

such

as overcrowding and harmful effects on the environment.

Fri Sep 27 2019

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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218 words

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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas and towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

The government should sometimes infringe on people's freedom for the security of society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?