An increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and health care costs. Why do you think so many children are overweight? What could be done to solve this problem?

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It is true that in contemporary society, numerous children become obesity and
this
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number
is continuing rise
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is continuing to rise
. Reasons for
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vary, and steps need to be
tackle
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tackling
the problem. There are several reasons why the number of obese and overweight children are growing.
Firstly
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, children consume more junk-food than it in the past.
Parents especially
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Parents, especially
who works outside the home are too busy to prepare healthy meals for their offspring.
As a result
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, they opt fast food which is
favored
preferred above all others and treated with partiality
favoured
by young people, convenient and inexpensive, as alternatives to everyday feasts. On of other factors
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most significantly linked to childhood obesity is a sedentary lifestyle. The development of technology
bring
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brings
the youth various forms of entertainment
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as playing computer games, watching television and so on. The increase amount of time spent in sedentary
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
has decreased the amount of time spent in physical activities. In Vietnam,
for example
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, most of the people under 18 years old prefer using technology devices
to
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for
taking part in outdoor activities.
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, the issue described above is not intractable. The simplest measure would be that parents and schools should cooperate to organize physical activities for the youth. Doing
excerise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
exercises
is a great way to improve both
metal
involving the mind or an intellectual process
mental
and physical health for all people.
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, many Vietnamese schools boost material activities in teenagers by establishing outside activities
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as sport competitions, climbing, picnic and so on. Another remedy is that governments have to launch
campaign
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a campaign
to increase people’s awareness about health care and obese children. They should encourage parents change children’s
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
behaviours
and diet by supplementing healthy foods and reduce fast food consumption as well as educate people about the dangers of overweight. In conclusion, childhood overweight is attributable to several factors.
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problem can be handled by adopting the
abovementioned
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above mentioned
solutions.

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