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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

#food #change #people
Preparation
 of
food
 is an important aspect of day to day life. Since,
food
 is most elementary need of human being, people are compelled to prepare
food
 for their survival. Recent technological development along with widespread online video materials available worldwide,
preparation
 of
food
 items has become an effortless and even far faster activity for people than ever before. Increased ease of
preparation
 of
food
 is registering
favorable impact
Suggestion
a favourable impact
favourable impact
the favourable impact
 upon the way people live. Before revolutionary progress of technology,
food
preparation
 had been a toilsome job. People used to employ tremendous amount of time and great deal of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 in
preparation
Suggestion
the preparation
 of
food
.
For instance
, once upon a time people used to burn wood to use as fuel and to produce heat to prepare
food
. Later on, discovery of abundant natural resources and technological development assisted people even more by presenting Electric heater, Gas stove etc.
to
Suggestion
To
further
 magnify ease in
food
preparation
.
Although
, change in fuel mechanisms in the
last
 few centuries added value in intensifying ease of cooking, now a
days
Suggestion
day
, cooking is even far simpler.
This
 happened
as a result
 of some
most recent
Suggestion
more recent
 developments that
aids
make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
adds
 much in fast cooking.
For example
, for
breakfast some
Accept comma addition
breakfast, some
 people use a toaster machine that automatically prepares bread and egg toasts. There are plenty of
such
 devices that speeds up
cooking process
Suggestion
the cooking process
 and reduce human
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 in todays modern world.
Thus
, we can now easily prepare
food
 for us while preserving energy and valuable time. That means our way of living is much more upgraded for converting our arduous job into a technology dependent work.
Also
, we can get relief from stress that would
otherwise
 have been originated from performing
toilsome cooking activity
Suggestion
a toilsome cooking activity
toilsome cooking activities
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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