At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
At the present time, the population of some countries includes a greater
number
of young adults compared to the number
of older people. This
situation has both advantages and disadvantages. these
two Suggestion
These
category
of people play different roles in a Suggestion
categories
country
. It is not easy to outweigh one
another.
When we talk about young people, what first
comes to our mind is that this
category of people are
the Suggestion
is
future
of a country
. If a country
do not have
a large Suggestion
does not have
number
of young aadults
, Suggestion
an adults
a adults
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
future
might be at stake. on
the other Suggestion
On
hand when
the Accept comma addition
hand, when
number
of senior citizen
becomes larger in Suggestion
citizens
number
comapred
to the examine and note the similarities or differences of
compared
number
of young adults, it may also
affect one
country
badly. the
people who are young adults today are the people who are going to be the Suggestion
The
future
leaders, doctors engineers
and so many other Accept comma addition
doctors, engineers
proffessionals
in engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professionals
professions
professional
one
country
. A country
that has large
Suggestion
a large number
number
of young adults than older people can keep confidence about the well future
of that specific country
if the education system is good. Education system
Suggestion
The education system
are
Suggestion
is
one
of the core things that are responsible for the situation of a nation. It is the education system that help
todays young adults to have good and sufficient knowledge Suggestion
helps
aout
necessary things related to individual or (of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
country
's wellbeing
. Suggestion
well being
Moreover
, another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
advantagesof
having young adults large in Suggestion
advantages of
number
is
that, these people are more Suggestion
are
energytic
and charismatic in comparison with the older people.
Now possessing or exerting or displaying energy
energetic
i
would like to discuss about the disadvantages of having less refers to the speaker or writer
I
number
of older people and large number
of young people. firstly
, the knowledge level of Suggestion
Firstly
people
increases with age. Suggestion
the people
for
example: there are huge differences between the skills of a 50 Suggestion
For
years
old Suggestion
year
leader
and a 35 years
old Suggestion
year
leader
. In the United States the leader
is atleast
60 years old and he is better experienced than the president of Saudi Arabia who is 35 years old. Neither Suggestion
at least
this
young leader
has good experience
of how to run a country nor
he has any previous Accept comma addition
country, nor
experience
or skills related to this
. Secondly
, the young adults learn things from the older people. for
example: let us talk about life Suggestion
For
experience
. an
older person has more life Suggestion
An
experience
compared to an
young person. Suggestion
a
there
are a lot of things that we learn from our parents and they are older than us. Suggestion
There
Similarly
, young leaders can follow the footsteps of older leaders who have proper experience
of running a country
smoothly. A country
would face severe disaster if suddenly an
young Suggestion
a
leader
takes over the power without any skills or experience
. another
example is the difference between senior doctors and young doctors. It is said that people learn with time and Suggestion
Another
experience
. undoubtedly
an older doctor would be much more skilled than a young doctor has he has Suggestion
Undoubtedly
better
Suggestion
a better experience
experience
.
I think, the advantages of this
situation where the number
of older people are becoming
less than young people does not outweigh the disadvantages. Suggestion
is becoming
there
should be Suggestion
There
proper ratio
of everything, be that Suggestion
a proper ratio
number
of people in one
country
. a
Suggestion
A
country
can never go too far if it lacks the skilled and experienced older people beacause
it is the people who will prepare the young people for for the reason that; on account of
because
future
.Suggestion
the future
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