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School and university students learn lessons far better from their teachers than from other sources, such as the Internet and television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Students pursuing education in University and school learn more lessons from various sources
such
 as
internet
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the internet
 and television rather than classroom lessons that are being taught by teachers. In
this
 essay I would like to express that I disagree with
above statement
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the above statement
 and explain my reasons below.
Internet
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The internet
 is a great resource
that is
 helpful in various ways to students, it offers a platform for them to explore and learn new things for instances learning about other cultures
,
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,
countries
,
Accept space
,
history of
mankind but
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mankind, but
, most of the information and data found on the internet is misleading and not reliable as it is not validated by individual experts. It is becoming a common trend for pupils to
relie
have confidence or faith in
rely
 on internet for completion of assignments, searching answers etc.
Some times
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Sometimes
 it may be of use, but can't be considered valuable than the acquired knowledge and
subect
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
 matter expertise of teachers. Apart from imparting knowledge in
form
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the form
 of lessons, good teacher always inspires to achieve greater heights.They
also
 act as mentor and contribute to
holistic development
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the holistic development
 of students. They have acquired troves of knowledge from their vast experience of teaching and impart them through lessons which is
irreplacable
impossible to replace
irreplaceable
 when compared to content
that is
 either found online or shown
of
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on
 television. In summay, I would like to pen down that value of lessons taught in class is far greater than students learning them from various other sources

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