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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend? You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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Quite often one encounters and extensive discussion among various sections of people in the society.
buying
Suggestion
Buying
 something in olden days was a bit difficult task,
however
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
 it has become a hobby to many peoples.I concur with the statement and
simutaneously
at the same instant
simultaneously
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will share my views on the both
side
Suggestion
sides
 of the statement.
Firstly
, I would like to reiterate the
positve
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 aspect
on
Suggestion
of
 the topic
,
Accept space
,
when we look at the olden days how people
spneds
pass time in a specific way
spends
thier
of them or themselves
their
third
time
 on
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
three
 general shopping with a less options and they keeps a record where they save
thie
definite article
the
time
 and money for how
frequent
Suggestion
frequently
 they need to buy
thier
of them or themselves
their
 things.
however these
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However, these
However these
 days abundance of options
are
Suggestion
is
 available and some of them are
fasicnating
capable of arousing and holding the attention
fascinating
 to the people to spend more
time
 on shopping as they spends on
thier
of them or themselves
their
 own hobbies.
On the other
hand i
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hand, I
hand I
 would like to highlight the negative side and reiterate the contradict of the statement spending much
time
 on shopping needs a huge range of money and
its
it is
it's
 not easy to every human being.
conclusion
Suggestion
Conclusion
, spending a limited
time
 on the shopping was the domestic
task whrereas
Accept comma addition
task, whereas
task whereas
 it has become a hobby which will not get any advantage to the peoples.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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