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Your English teacher has found a new penfriend. Write a letter to your penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you do in your free time.

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Dear Pat, My English teacher told me you were looking for a penfriend, so I'm writing to introduce myself to you. I'm 24 years old and I live in Canada.I'm working as an engineer.
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 live outside the city in a house with my parents and a sibling. I absolutely adore her and we love each other.We often hang out like friends
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 the theatres.I Now about my hobbies and interests, I like spending a lot of time indoors. But I am a fitness fanatic too! I usually wake up early to jog at the park
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 and try to do yoga before hitting the sack. I always go swimming in the summers, as I cannot
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 the heat. I rarely hit the gym, in
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 detest it. I don't like running on the treadmill, while simple staring aimlessly into the space.I make it a point to go trekking once a month
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 and go to the sports club once
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a fortnight. I often watch shows on ..with my family over the weekends. I
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 read fiction and have a mini-library at home. That was enough about me! Tell me about yourself. What do you do ? How do you pass your leisure time
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 I'd love to hear from you soon. Best wishes,
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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