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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares information about the
number
 of social networking websites visited by
people
 in Canada in the
years
 2014 and 2015.
Overall
, the
number
 of
people
 visiting
one
 social media website is the highest in both
the
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years
. Usage of social media has slightly increased in
one
year
.
Moreover
, the
number
 of
people
 using multiple sites
also
 increased in
one
year
. The
number
 of social networking
site
users
 slightly went up by 1% in 2015, leaving just above 20% of
people
 with no social media.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
users
, who only registered for
one
 social networking
site
 declined by 8%. Multiple
site
users
 increased from 2014 to 2015, with 2015 registering slightly more
users
 in two sites with nearly around 25% in both
the
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years
. Three
site
users
 were 12% in 2014, It went up by 4% in 2015 making 16% of
total
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 population use three sites. Four-
site
users
also
 went up by 3% in
one
year
.
Finally
, the total population of five
site
users
 doubled in a
year
. In both
years
, five
site
users
 are minimum with 2% and 4% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, years, one, year, site, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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