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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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According to some people, governments that
condamn
express strong disapproval of
condemn
 murderers with the capital punishment, commit murder as well. Even if it is an issue extremely controversial, I tend to agree with
this
 kind of interpretation.
Therefore
, an assassin should be punished with a life sentence
instead
 of the
death
penalty
. Those who believe that killers should be punished with the
death
, are convinced that these kind of criminals cannot change and they do not deserve to live anymore. In
fact for
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fact, for
this
people
Suggestion
person
, the only acceptable
penalty
 for the executer of certain crimes (like murder) should be the capital
punishement
the act of punishing
punishment
.
Luckly there
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Luckily, there
Luckily there
 are only some regions in the world where the
death
penalty
 is legally accepted. The majority of people believe that no one should have the power to decide whether a person should live or die, even the highest authority, in
this
 case the government.
However
, as mentioned above, unfortunately there are still some states (
also
 in the western world) where
this
 practice is not unlawful yet. European countries were pioneers in
this
 context, and
death
Suggestion
the death penalty
penalty
started
Suggestion
has started
 to be banned since the 18th century. At that time,
prison
Suggestion
the prison
 was considered to be the best way of punishing people, and
this
 belief is still part of the modern society. Nobody should be killed, even if he or she committed the worst crime as killing someone else. In conclusion, the society is in constantly evolving and more and more governments are taking distance from these kind of punishments. Obviously, taking life from someone has always been considered the worst crime,
hence
 the government should not put itself on the same level of
criminlas
the property of having the thickness of heavy cream
creaminess
.
Life sentence
Suggestion
A life sentence
 is definitely a better way to punish people, even murderers.

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